lunes, 25 de enero de 2010

Introduction





Welcome to my virtual portfolio!



This space is a collection of some works that I have done during the semestrer and I put them on my blog so everyone can read what I have written.


Here I have some paragraphs with things about me, for example letters for the people that I love, The Essay (my opinion of a police case). Who is my heroe and things that I have lived, each one with a reflection.


This and much more you can read on my virtual space.

lunes, 18 de enero de 2010

Conclusion


I can conclude that this job was very amazing, intensive and very interesting. I learned a lot of things like the difference between in formal and informal letters and how to make them fine. One day we have to write some letter looking for a job for example, and we will need this important information. Also I learnt what is a free writing. I really enjoyed doing them.
Free writing has benefits:

  • It makes you more comfortable with the act of writing.
  • It can be a valve to release inner tensions.
  • It can help you discover things to write about.
  • It can indirectly improve your formal writing.
  • It can be fun, and much more.
About the paragraphs (Narrative : tell a story and Descriptive: Provide specific details about what something) That was very good to me. I learned to be more clear when I am writing paragraphs. I had done it in spanish, but in english it wasn't easy for me.

I really enjoyed the Pre- writing, Draft and the Essay. Those were more complicated than the other works.

And the other like the invitation. I really had fun with this :)

I loved this Portfolio step by step. I love writing what I'm feeling, what I'm thinkig and with this work I could do it, because everything were my composition.

Pre-writing



Pre-writing


A 62 years old man named Leroy Strachan has been arrested.

The crime that took place 45 years ago.

Officer John Milledge was killed.

Procecutors are unlikely to seek in this case.

The death penalty.

what is the best justice?

The law is impartial for everyone.

Everybody must to pay their mistakes.

Strachan is a good person.

Difficult situation.

I remembered "Cold Case" serie

How he could live with that "Karma"





Reflection:

The purpose of pre-writing is getting concrete details down on paper before organizing a new piece into paragraphs.
When I read the story about Strachan, I enjoyed a lot, because I had to think deeply and I learned to found the most important ideas for the essay. That wasn't difficult at the beginning but at the end I had to use them to complete my draft, I need good ideas.

Draft


The justice a polemic word, a polemic situation. Always people have to wanted the true justice.
Sometimes the has been criticized in bad way and sometimes
the justice has been applauded.
Everybody has different opinion in a particular situation depending on the place who are they.
So how can we know the truth or the justice? Which is the best way? we have to know that every crime, every mistake have to pay although had already ocurred.
We read and see in the news a person who killed someone; the difficult situation is when have passed many years. What happens to him? the real justice think in every cases and has to make a choice thinking in the security of the city and knows that the truth always is realized and make the guilty pay.

Leroy Strachan has admitted his involvement in the murder of Officer Milledge 45 years ago. That is too many years with a huge secret. I think that is very difficult to live with that "karma".
He has lived a responsible life since the time when he committed this crime. . Strachan's niece says that he was a perfect person and many people say this too. Like "Cold Case" serie; Every crime have to pay although had already ocurred . Scrachan is guilty we know that.


The law has to make a good choice. The veredic mustn't be crude with him because he has evidence that he is a good person. He tries to be better. He has to stay not much time. when we do something wrong. we have to pay our mistakes. the life is like this.



Reflection:

The Draft and the Essay were the most difficult work to me because I had to work hard. I had to stablish and defend an opinion with support and evidence
. After the pre-writing I had to find the main idea: the thesis stament, that wasn't easy. In spite of it was difficult I liked writing and thinking in what would be the best veredic to Strachan.

Essay


Justice is a polemic word, a polemic situation. Always people have to wanted the true justice...
Sometimes the justice has been criticized in bad way and sometimes
the justice has been applauded.

Everybody has different opinion about ir depending on the place who are they. So how can we know the truth or the justice? Which is the best way? we have to know that every crime, every mistake have to pay although the crime took place many time ago.
We read and see in the news
a person who killed someone; the difficult situation is when have passed many years. What happens to him? the real justice has to make a choice thinking in the security of the city and knows that people realize; truth is discovered and will make that the guilty pay.

Leroy Strachan has admitted his involvement in the murder of Officer Milledge 45 years ago. That is too many years with a huge secret. I think that is very difficult to live with that "karma".
We know that he has lived a responsible life since the time when he committed this crime. He has tree sons and a family. Strachan's niece said that he is a perfect person and many people in florida expressed sympathy for him. Like "Cold Case" serie; Every crime have to pay
although the crime took place many 45 years ago. Scrachan is guilty anyway. The law has to make a good choice. The veredic mustn't be crude with him because he has evidence that he is a good person.
he tries to be better. He has to stay not much time. when we do something wrong. we have to pay our mistakes. the life is like this.




Reflection:

That was the most difficult work as the Draft. I learned more the structure of the Essay and how would be the Introduction, the Body and the Conclusion.
This essay was a challenge that helped me to improve my English (The vocabulary and the grammar). I liked Strachan's case and telling what I'm thinking and what is my veredic.


Freewriting II




Why weekends should be longer?


I want longer weekends because first we can rest better. All the week we work hard and the mayority of us ocupy the time in things for a duty and we arrive too late at home. Sometimes we don't have time to stay with our family, our friends. This is a big problem for the society because the people are very frustrated without enough time . Weekends should be longer because we need more time just to make things right, like go out with some relatives, read a book, cook different meal, relax, share and have great times with the people that we really love. With a good rest we will begin well the week with a clear mind.






Reflection:

With that job we could chose a topic to write and then I knew what is a freewriting.
Is a writing technique in which a person writes continuously for a set period of time without regard to spelling, grammar, or topic to discover what you know, think and feel, That is interesting. I like writing poems and letter, but this topic made me think in the importance of to have longer weekends just to make things rigth and to value the time and the people that we love.

Freewriting I



Who I consider my Hero.

My superhero is my God...Jesus Christ

All for love father gave his life, my celestial father...
Everybody has faults, nobody is perfect and nobody deserves live, nothing.

¨For God so loved the world that he gave his only Son (Jesus)
so that everyone who believes in him may not perish but may
have eternal life¨ The Bible says

My hero, Jesus, who though he was in the form of God, did not regard
equality with God as something to be exploited,
but emptied himself, taking the form of a slave,
being born in human likeness and being found in human form,
he humbled himself and become obedient to the point of death,
even death an a cross... all for love.
And the 3rd day he had his resurrection.

In the chaos, in confusion I know you are soverign Still (God)
In the moment of my weakness he gives me grace. To do your will
all of my hope is in him.

Nobody can or be able to do the same as He did,
does and will do in my life.

He is my superhero, He created everything that I have.
and everything is in the world.

I believe that he is my superhero and he an be the hero for the world
if they want, because he loves everybody.




Reflection:

This was my favorite work. I really enjoyed this free writing. Here I express what Jesus means to me, showing everyone who is my true Hero, and that is very wonderful and important to me. I also learned that the point of doing free writing is the process, not the final result. If you follow the guidelines like "Do not make corrections as you write" and the other guidelines that we saw in class, our free writing will be successful.


domingo, 17 de enero de 2010

Formal Letter


1650 Gabriela Mistral Street
Janaury 7, 2010

The editor
The New York Times
133 West 43 street
New York, NY 10036

To the Editor:

I've just read this story about Jessica. First of all I think that the adoption is a good way to go because it provides a family, a new life for children with no parents.

Jessica's case is one example of that. At the beginning Jessica's biological mother gave up her for adoption. If she chose that was because she thought that she couldn't take care of the baby.

In the other hand The DeBoers were very happy with Jessica. She gave them a new reason to live: a family. And obviosly Jessica got the same thing. And now after a long time Cara wants that Jessica returns to her, and that is a bad thing for Jessica and for the DeBoers too.

Jessica has to live with the DeBoers, they are her real family. Blood ties are not always the most important things. Love, security, education can be more significant. Jessica Should decide, I'm sure she knows which is her home.


Sincerely
RosyCheeks
Nataly Farias


Reflection:

I liked writing this letter, I felt really important as if the editor were to read my letter. That was very interesting and good for me. This kind of letter needs more details, needs to be more specific and direct not like the informal letter.

Narrative Paragraph



My most memorable experience


When I was little child I remember a lots of things, but my most memorable experience was when I had 8 years old. I lived in temuco and of my summer vacation I went to Lican Ray with my family. That was my first time that I saw that beautiful place. I climb the high mountain; it had a lots of trees, flowers, secrets ways. I went to one of them with my sister. Everything was amazing, but we lost the way to go out. We continued walking and later we saw a secret lake, really a part of a wonder lake named Calafquén. Here I swam for first time. After that my parents found us and we enjoyed with that paradise.




Reflection:

I liked too much doing this paragraph about my memorable experience and I learned that
a narrative paragraph is a story. Also I learned that to write an effective narrative paragraph, the author must be creative yet concise. A well-written narrative paragraph will appeal to readers because of the author's thorough knowledge of the subject and ability to communicate effectively.

Description Paragraph



What is a good friend?


A good friend is a person who loves you anyway. He or she knows you very good; your deffects and yours virtues. He or she wants the best for you and never is waiting something in return when he or she gives you his or her love. He makes you smile, he always tells you the truth. He is with you in good and bad times. He always corrects your mistakes. You can trust in him and he gives you the best of him when you need an advices. He carries you when you just can't go on, but if he can. A good friend is more than that, he is like a brother ...a present of God.






Reflection:

Descriptive paragraphs let the reader touch, taste, see, hear and smell what you are describing. The reader should feel as if they can see what you are describing clearly. You want to paint a picture as you write the descriptive paragraph. I like describing what is a good friend because we need to choose good friends for the rest of our lifes.


Girl's Party (Invitation)








Reflection:

I had a lot of fun doing this job; collecting the materials like scissors, colour papers, and thinking on which would be the topic of my invitation. With this job I learned how to make a perfect invitation for my friends and others. I learned that I shouldn't forget to specify the topic of the invitation: the things that would be there, the time, the place, the day, and the address. I liked very much. Now, I don't need to buy an invitation, because now I can make it with my own hands.




Informal Letter


Dear Benjamin:

I wish you to be okay. The reason of this letter is for to tell you something very important for me and for our friendship. I'm very happy for your baby that's the truth; at the beginnig I was very sad, and I couldn't understand because you know that I loved you more than friends. Before all, you told me a lot of things like you love me, you want to stay with me, etc. You gave me a false hope. I believe you and you broke something, but I know It was a mistake. Now I know that we have differents ways...The lord gave me a wonderful boyfriend and it is very special for me. I got a real hope no more illusions. I don't know what will happen tomorrow and the day after tomorrow, but I know that someday everything will be better, perfect in spite of some things... I wish that we can be friends forever and ever. Be happy sure about your hapiness. I love you anyway.


Your friend forever
Nataly.




Reflection:

First of all I felt very thougthful doing this letter, because It wasn't an invention, It was something worse that happend in the past, but and now I'm better. The thing was that I always had wanted to write it to my friend as something hanging. I did it more poetical, I think, with more dedication and obviosly using the instruction about the informal letter, because I learned the structure for it.